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Scarves by =horsegirljen10:iconhorsegirljen10:



Let them hang in coordinate colors
On the dressers of the rich
For the gay guy and the hooker and the anorexic bitch
Let them grope and whine and fuck and grind
As the lay upon their crosses
Tossing, turning; roasting, burning
Like the heads of devil horses

So they'll sob and sigh and start to lie
And eventually die together
For sins have equaled, doubled those who
Die with scars unmeasured
And the faded cloth will whip away
To dust in vengeful deserts
While lamenting to their maker
With the tears of mournful converts
©2006-2008 =horsegirljen10
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This is a weird poem. Yesterday in history, my friend Emily was wearing a white scarf. She wears scarves a lot and has a lot of different ones, and the one she wore yesterday reminded me of something my mom had said a month or two earlier.
"Some people can get away with scarves, and they really zest up an outfit. They don't look good on me, though."

So I started writing a poem about how only some people could get away with scarves, but it wasn't very good. It was open and cheesy. Then, all of a sudden, out spilled the first couple lines of this poem. (Up to "anorexic bitch")

I finished the second half today, and it was hard to match the end with the beginning because I liked the first part so much. Anyway, I'd really like some help on this.

Obviously this is not bashing gay guys, hookers, or even anorexic bitches. I don't like how it ended up sounding that way.

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~Houshi-luver:iconHoushi-luver: Dec 7, 2006, 1:25:46 PM
Wooooooooooooooooooooooooow. Really deep poem. Kind of lost the "scarves" bit, but whatever. This is really great. :heart: :heart: :heart:

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~Brightside17:iconBrightside17: Dec 7, 2006, 3:01:45 PM
Yeah yeah, 'advanced critique' shhhmrfff. I like it. And you've heard me tell you like everything about it. Two things. One, is that seriously how you spell anorexic? Cause I could've sworn there was an o. Second, desserts would totaly make that line better. Totally.

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=horsegirljen10:iconhorsegirljen10: Dec 8, 2006, 2:49:43 PM
No, it isn't. I couldn't make up my mind on the way it was spelled, so I erred on the side of being too lazy to check.

Hahaha, desserts. :heart:

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=horsegirljen10:iconhorsegirljen10: Dec 8, 2006, 2:50:39 PM
Thanks! The title was leftover from the beginning of this poem that I ended up leaving out, but I don't really know about it. I mean..I don't know. lol.

Thanks again!

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*Areku26:iconAreku26: Mar 24, 2007, 10:31:31 PM
i agree with amy. kinda derailed there.

the words click and i like the sound of it. You're getting good at rhymning without cheesing. :D

you and sara both are getting too graphic for my virgin mind. you with the death and she with the sex. x_x

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=horsegirljen10:iconhorsegirljen10: Mar 25, 2007, 10:13:37 PM
bah. I don't know what to do about the title. bah.
thank you! I'm glad my rhyming isn't too sucky.

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